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for Birthday

by pleasures0901

person Rayven Nocturne
schedule June 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You can't write, you can't spell, and you have no talent. Why did you even bother to post this? I could write better if I was drunk and high at the same time! You're terrible! Learn to spell before posting something! It was just plain awful! One of the worst fics that I have ever read. It's bad. And the people that reviewed this probably can't even write a decent fic themselves! I hope you never write anything ever again!
person Katy
schedule September 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
a good start can't wait to see how anita greets him when he gets up.
person lia
schedule September 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
good story. surprised u spelled Jean claudes nickname for anita wrong. ANd from reading the books that anita...well she hates him and wants him at the same time. good story..cant wait to read the next story
person lia
schedule September 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
holy shit that was a great story. It sent shivers down my spine. good work. keep it up...
person Lukeila
schedule September 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I think you have good fic, but you have some minor errors with spelling, format & mechanics.
I don't mean to nitpick, it's just that I notice things like that due to the many hours spent in Expository Writing classes.
Other than that, your story has creative content and was very fun to read.
person Chibihana
schedule July 31, 2004 at 12:00 AM
It was a good story but you don't know how to spell. It's "ma petite", not "ma piete"...that part fucked it up...keep writind und use spellcheck next time you write a story.
person rerae
schedule July 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Funny.
To bad Anita can't let go and live a little in the books.
I liked the surprise. It was unexpected but believeable.
Ran across several typos. If you need a beta just sent your stories my way.
Reesa
4 stars
person Johanna
schedule July 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Kinda mediocre, but kinda good too. Not the best-written sex scene, but you captured Anita's sarcasm pretty well.
person anon
schedule July 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
hey this story was great!
i hope that this isnt the end though.
person gojoba
schedule July 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
i love anita/jc. cute story. however, it would be a little easier to read if you formatted it into clearly defined paragraphs (traditionally each time a person speaks, he/she gets their own paragraph.) and if you wanted to condense it into fewer chapters, since the chappies themselves aren't that long, that would also make reading it a little easier. the story itsels grs great though!! hope to read more from you soon.
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