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wait! more? That was very nice but shame on James for manipulating her like so....he probably even killed the cook just for that, or had him killed.... sorry my brain is fried, it happens when you read too much fan-fiction adn Flying With Eagles is going to be the death of me....as will this story. I HATE YOU ALL! * whimpers * sorry, I just wish I could write so well as you and Zar. Zar made me cry like a baby earlier this afternoon. * glares at you * and no doubt you will too, eventually. * runs away * ta

I absolutely love your story, and I adore your Hook. He is so playful, but still a rouge trying to steel kisses from ladies. I mean yes he's still a violent man, but hey he's a pirate. Please keep going, I love it!!!!!

Hey great chapter. Thank you sooo much for the spacing, it makes the story so much easier to read which of course makes it more enjoyable. I like the way they both seem to be playing with each other. Poor Smee, now he'll have to cook for everyeone. I'll tell you though, if Wendy doesn't want to be Hook's private valet, I would love to voluteer myself for the ahem, position.

Very good. This just slay me:

" You merely attend to my every wish and command. Is that so difficult.?"

" It might not be agreeable."

" Oh I think it could be downright enjoyable..."

Wendy isn't going to succumb altogether easily to the good Captain, is she? Thank you for spacing up the text, it's so much easier to follow now.

Very good! I can't wait to see what Wendy's new duties are. thanks for updating so quickly. Keep it up!

Really excellent story so far. I loved some of Hook's lines in this chap Pl Please keep the updates coming - am very much looking forward to more.

This is excellent. I eagerly await the next chapter.

Great story. But please just a few little suggestions. Paragraphs should always be separated. And when you start a dialoge it should always be separated as well from the paragraph. For example:

"hello"

"Hello yourself"

Like this. It makes it easier to read and it makes it easier to read the characters dialogue.

I hope you have a new chapter for us soon.

I'm enjoying this story very much and I look forward to see more of it. And I promise, most Hook fics makes me push the back button within a few paragraph.

But, though your story is interesting enough to be read anyway, the formating is a bit trying for the old eyes. If you left a blank space between paragraphs and also evertime a new peron speaks, it would be easier to read. I also had to re-read some lines as it was a bit too easy to get tangled up in whom it was who was speaking. I'm afraid some people get scared awaen ien it's hard to read and that would be a pity as your story is well wort reading. And it really isn't your story that there is anything wrong with.

I love Hook/Wendy stories, especially steamy ones. I can't wait to read how Wendy earns her keep.