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August 31, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Hi there,
It seems this story hasn't been reviewed since 6yrs ago?!
Part 8 really should not be the end, we need more please?
You seem to have a good knack for driving your readers' imaginations with each turn of phrase... Makes me curious to find and read something else you've written too. :)
When I first started reading I was hoping for a female Tinkerbell pairing with someone, perhaps Peter, but my initial disappointment at your Tink being male soon faded with your clever play-on-words (Faerie/Fairy) and the way this story unfolded thereafter.
I do author on here myself, or rather I did several years ago. - At least you updated more often than I did/have! :)
Please email me when you update this story? Or in any event if you just want to reply,
Can't wait to see what else you come up with!
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Fu (FuBar)
RPC_FuBar@yahoo.co.uk
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October 4, 2010 at 12:00 AM
few mistakes here and there but i happens. love the storyline:) i always though her and peter should have stayed together. i am just loving what you took out of peter pan and made ur own, you took it and added ur own twist of imagination to it. i think u should finish it because chapter 8 is a terrible place to leave it. what happens when they go back? is everything ok? will they really stan the test of time in his world?! theses questions i must know. so finish ur story pretty please!!!!
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August 26, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Just found this story and it is awesome! Cool reference to mortal magic there too. Can't wait to read the next part(s).
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June 30, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Oh, this is very intriguing! I like how you have taken what we know and added on; very interesting! Peter speaks like such a grown up. I will keep reading, great setup!
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June 30, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I am eager to know what stories Wendy will tell! I am also wanting more Nibs/Tink...and the other pairings mentioned...! so far, this is quite grim, but I like the change of pace from what we expect in Neverland. And, bringing in the Seelie and Unseelie legends (although I thought they were related to Ireland only? No, I'm wrong) is very intriguing.
can't wait for more!
can't wait for more!
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June 30, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I love this, even if the pace is going slowly. I am willing to read tons of parts to find out what happens!
This line is sheer genius, so lovely: "It was not that night had come you see, but that something as dark as night had come. No, worse. It had not come yet, but had sent the shiver ahead of itself to tell all of its coming."
In fact, that is what stood out to me in this part. You are very mystical about your writing. Also, I feel like you are some wise old person telling me an ancient story; there is an omniscient author sort of presence in this. It makes me feel like I'm reading a Tolkien or C.S. Lewis or something. Very cool effect!
I hope Wendy/Peter comes soon! If we are waiting until she is legal, can you do a "five years later" thing at some point? I'm sorry, I tend to be impatient. But this is very intriguing! Do it how you like, and I shall read it. :)
This line is sheer genius, so lovely: "It was not that night had come you see, but that something as dark as night had come. No, worse. It had not come yet, but had sent the shiver ahead of itself to tell all of its coming."
In fact, that is what stood out to me in this part. You are very mystical about your writing. Also, I feel like you are some wise old person telling me an ancient story; there is an omniscient author sort of presence in this. It makes me feel like I'm reading a Tolkien or C.S. Lewis or something. Very cool effect!
I hope Wendy/Peter comes soon! If we are waiting until she is legal, can you do a "five years later" thing at some point? I'm sorry, I tend to be impatient. But this is very intriguing! Do it how you like, and I shall read it. :)
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December 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really love this fic. Its a seemless joining of the original peter pan and the fey. I love it.
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October 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was clever. I liked it. I always did suspect that Peter was an elf.
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July 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
First, I must say that I thoroughly enjoy this idea for an alternate Pan-universe, that it is certainly one of the most creative concepts I have ever seen in this type of fanfiction. Second, your writing style is unique, blending simplicity with vivid imagery - most authors can only write either very simply, which dulls the story, or the writing is constantly over the top. The combination you display is amazing, switching styles almost imperceptibly. Third, I saw your response where you claim you are no good with fighting scenes - as this is one of my specialties, I'd be happy to work a few for you if you want to add a few of those scenes. Fourth - I want to see more of this, and soon!
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June 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ok so far it is very good even though it lacks a bit of depth in detail department. And as for parings i would sugjest peter/wendy (duh) OC/oldest of the brothers and for the yopunger one well this will be odd but tink/youngest brother. of corse all parings are leagal and such. maybe if you can make the story span just a lil say 20 years give or take have peter place a spell on wendy makeing her young and or do the same for the other boys. just a sugjestion but other wise the only other thing i can think of is make hook a dragon with one metal arm ... well any way love the story and please email me with updates.
l8er.
l8er.