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January 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
At least Christine has the ring. And I hope Raoul doesn't hurt her! If Erik saw he would come right in wihtout thinking I bet! Grr. Raoul should burn in Hell. Update soon please!
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January 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*gasp* whats ginna happen?! update please!
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January 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow,
awesome story!
I really like the way everyone is characterized. o_o
Good job!
I hope to see more soon!
awesome story!
I really like the way everyone is characterized. o_o
Good job!
I hope to see more soon!
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January 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like the plotline of this story. It's not as original as it could be but with all the POTO fic's showing up, featured either during or after the movie/book/both, its hard to make an original writing. There are some areas where the sentence structure and spelling needs major helps. Do you have a beta?
Please don't take this as a flame; if you read other places where I have reviewed, I give much with the constructive criticism. I like where you are going with this; it has more of a book feel than movie feel. I enjoy the writing style you use, and the fact that Erik went to the trouble of purchasing a home for Christine and himself; so much the book.
As for the "Arg-I-Hate-Raoul-He-Should-Be-Evil-&-Cruel-All-Hate-Him' approach, I am guilty of using it too, but not to the extent of abuse. Violence, yes, threats, yes, but never does he hurt, or even touch Christine in a harmful way. I must agree with Jula on this from a previous post of hers: Raoul is not evil, but blinded by love. And for this he is turned into the villian of the story. When, in truth, is Erik not at fault for feeling the same way about Christine; does he not do things because of his love for her that he would not do normally?(think movie on that one; in the book Erik is a sadistic s.o.b.)
Sorry, I kind of ranted there, but think about it; you've made Raoul into this abusing, hating, jealous, probably cheating(just judging by his behaviour) man all because he is overly concerned for the well being of his young wife. Just try not to do as the seemingly endless stream of new fan fic writers appear to be doing and make Raoul into more of a villian than he really is. Yes, hate him all you want; just be true to his character.
I repeat, this isn't a flame. PROMISE!! I like your writing; the main points of this really long review are you need a beta(or a better one if you have one) and that you need to be more accurate to the characters created by Gaston and redone by Andrew. You have artistic license; don't abuse it.
Keep up the good writing!
Much love
Angel Marie
Please don't take this as a flame; if you read other places where I have reviewed, I give much with the constructive criticism. I like where you are going with this; it has more of a book feel than movie feel. I enjoy the writing style you use, and the fact that Erik went to the trouble of purchasing a home for Christine and himself; so much the book.
As for the "Arg-I-Hate-Raoul-He-Should-Be-Evil-&-Cruel-All-Hate-Him' approach, I am guilty of using it too, but not to the extent of abuse. Violence, yes, threats, yes, but never does he hurt, or even touch Christine in a harmful way. I must agree with Jula on this from a previous post of hers: Raoul is not evil, but blinded by love. And for this he is turned into the villian of the story. When, in truth, is Erik not at fault for feeling the same way about Christine; does he not do things because of his love for her that he would not do normally?(think movie on that one; in the book Erik is a sadistic s.o.b.)
Sorry, I kind of ranted there, but think about it; you've made Raoul into this abusing, hating, jealous, probably cheating(just judging by his behaviour) man all because he is overly concerned for the well being of his young wife. Just try not to do as the seemingly endless stream of new fan fic writers appear to be doing and make Raoul into more of a villian than he really is. Yes, hate him all you want; just be true to his character.
I repeat, this isn't a flame. PROMISE!! I like your writing; the main points of this really long review are you need a beta(or a better one if you have one) and that you need to be more accurate to the characters created by Gaston and redone by Andrew. You have artistic license; don't abuse it.
Keep up the good writing!
Much love
Angel Marie
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January 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great suspense at the end, it's killing me to know the outcome. Great story!
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January 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I hope Erik finds his ring!!! That would be awful if he can't. I hope Christine will return to him or something! Please update soon!
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January 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You're trying to make me cry, aren't you?
Well done, you nearly did!
Hurry with the next chapter!
Mwah, Luv Skimbleshanks!
xxxMeowxxx
Well done, you nearly did!
Hurry with the next chapter!
Mwah, Luv Skimbleshanks!
xxxMeowxxx
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January 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*.* Wow! Intense, really intense!
Brilliant! Update really really really really really soon!!!
Will this eventually become E/C? Coz that would be really nice considering Christine's thoughts
Mwah, Luv Skimbleshanks!
xxxMeowxxx
Brilliant! Update really really really really really soon!!!
Will this eventually become E/C? Coz that would be really nice considering Christine's thoughts
Mwah, Luv Skimbleshanks!
xxxMeowxxx
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January 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I think Raoul is a little too out of character... But it is well written.... Not sure if I like it though. No offense...
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January 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like it I like it alot,
please continue, I would like to read what happens next
please continue, I would like to read what happens next