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Incredible work. They work really well together, and Raistlin is not yet the viper he will be after the test. I also like their sweet moments, and the way they can read each other. Their journey is a pleasure to read, in all senses. Thanks for sharing!

I love Raistlin/Dalamar stories, and I must say that this has to be one of the best, if not the best, I've ever read. Your understanding of the characters, the way they interact, was flawless. And the sex was hot, but still tender enough to allow underlying emotions to show through. On the whole, great story. It makes me wish there were more here than what's written.

You absolutely must continue!

Personally, I think that you should do two sequels, the first one starting right after dawn, and the second one sometime after Raistlin's test, or maybe after he and Caramon meet up with everyone at the Inn, or just sometime later. I don't really care, just continue this story line!

I was hooked on your story instantly, and I think you did a very good job on keeping them both in character, especially with Raistlin and Dalamar's first time together.

Please keep writing, and I hope that you come up with a sequel very very soon!

--Analia

aw.. so cool and i luv the pairing *kicks kit kicks crys* XD it's so well done.. soulforged is my favourite part of dl and omfg your story fits in some way, weeh!.. and the sequel.. wish i could read it right now but it's nearly midday *such a slow reader* now i'm too tired wtf.. #_# blah.. yet happy ive stayed up for the end was great. yey! good stuff.. gooood stuff! ^_^ lookin forward to read more

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I really enjoyed this and would be interested in a follow up. I too would be intereted in seeing how things would go with Kit & Caramon.

You nailed Raistlin's responses too. I'm very impressed.

to quote a friend of mine "Don't you DARE stop there!!!! This had better not be a one shot or you're going to have a riot on your hands.!!!"

Ok so i'm a Quiet Riot (lol) But this BEGGGGGGGGGS !! for a sequal. i agree that it almost needs to be AU and i would also love to see them hanging around Solance getting into scrapes and messes and causing havoc for the residences. I'd also love to see more of Caramon's over protective, big lummox self, trying to be "helpfull", concerning his "little" brothers new relationship. Bcz i think he wouldn't "get it" at first ... like the Big picture of it all. but thats just me. the way Raist and Dalamar are so in yet out of character is brilliant.

Hi again :)

I’m glad you updated this so soon; I loved those last three chapters <>. There are a few spelling mistakes towards the end of chapter six, but the action itself is excellent. The part where Dalamar calls Raistlin ‘Shalafi’ is a particularly nice touch. It made me smile.

I think you captured the characters well, and although we didn't see much of Kitiara, it definitely felt like her.

To answer your question, I would love to see a sequel to this AU. As far as I am concerned, I would like to see you carry on with this where you have left off. They are just discovering each other, and it could be great fun to see them hanging around Solace being slightly dark and evil together.

My email address is at the top. I would be grateful if you tell me when you update. Damn, I wish I was your beta reader. <>

Cheers,

N :)

Hi there:) Not sure how much my opinion counts, but… I don’t know why you were worried. I thought it was a beautifully written scene. The time and the place make it perfect for Dalamar to be the seducer here, and we all know it is in his nature. I also think that you portrayed Raistlin’s inexperience perfectly.

I’m glad that there were no silly modern words to put the reader off, even though it makes sex a thousand times harder to write.

I will be very interested to see how this affects their ‘daytime’ relationship on the road.

Cheers,

N :)

Well, hello and welcome to the Adult Fan Fiction Archive, not-so-stranger. It's Ahn-Li Steffraini (yes, that Ahn-Li!) from FF.N. I know I'll enjoy your stories here as much as I did there.

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