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November 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wtf? huhh?
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July 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It was actually Street Angel's review that mase me decide to read the story. I have to say that the story wasn't good but for different reasons Street Angel did.
So what if Cassie lived on a farm in the book? Obviously this story is AU, so the facts can be tweeked, but it is a good idea to put in the sumarry that the story is AU. Having that in the sumarry means that someone can't complain about how they all live on the same steet in your story when they do not in the book.
What I find funny that noting was mentioned how the chapter is so extremly short. It was mostly one big paragraph. And the story is rushed.
IF you really do like your story though you can fix those things.
Rewrite the first chapter and flesh it out. Include several paragraphs, not one big one. Tht makes it harder to read.
So what if Cassie lived on a farm in the book? Obviously this story is AU, so the facts can be tweeked, but it is a good idea to put in the sumarry that the story is AU. Having that in the sumarry means that someone can't complain about how they all live on the same steet in your story when they do not in the book.
What I find funny that noting was mentioned how the chapter is so extremly short. It was mostly one big paragraph. And the story is rushed.
IF you really do like your story though you can fix those things.
Rewrite the first chapter and flesh it out. Include several paragraphs, not one big one. Tht makes it harder to read.
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July 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It was actually Street Angel's review that mase me decide to read the story. I have to say that the story wasn't good but for different reasons Street Angel did.
So what if Cassie lived on a farm in the book? Obviously this story is AU, so the facts can be tweeked, but it is a good idea to put in the sumarry that the story is AU. Having that in the sumarry means that someone can't complain about how they all live on the same steet in your story when they do not in the book.
What I find funny that noting was mentioned how the chapter is so extremly short. It was mostly one big paragraph. And the story is rushed.
IF you really do like your story though you can fix those things.
Rewrite the first chapter and flesh it out. Include several paragraphs, not one big one. That makes it harder to read.
So what if Cassie lived on a farm in the book? Obviously this story is AU, so the facts can be tweeked, but it is a good idea to put in the sumarry that the story is AU. Having that in the sumarry means that someone can't complain about how they all live on the same steet in your story when they do not in the book.
What I find funny that noting was mentioned how the chapter is so extremly short. It was mostly one big paragraph. And the story is rushed.
IF you really do like your story though you can fix those things.
Rewrite the first chapter and flesh it out. Include several paragraphs, not one big one. That makes it harder to read.
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July 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Sorry appout that, I didn't mean to leave TWO reviews. The 'enter' button got stuck!
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June 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
funny and scary!
hope you continue!
hope you continue!
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June 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow.
This might be the worst Animorph story I've ever read. First off, it's "Rachel". You spelled it wrong. Second, Tobias is a hawk. Marco doesn't live close to Jake and Rachel anymore. And Cassie lives on a farm on the outskirts of the city. They don't all live on the same street.
The lack of character development and overall plot was astounding. You would have been better to have never published this, and if you actually needed HELP writing this, you should do everyone a favor and get out of my fandom. It's fics like this that gradually erode the stature of a once great series.
-The Steel Angel
This might be the worst Animorph story I've ever read. First off, it's "Rachel". You spelled it wrong. Second, Tobias is a hawk. Marco doesn't live close to Jake and Rachel anymore. And Cassie lives on a farm on the outskirts of the city. They don't all live on the same street.
The lack of character development and overall plot was astounding. You would have been better to have never published this, and if you actually needed HELP writing this, you should do everyone a favor and get out of my fandom. It's fics like this that gradually erode the stature of a once great series.
-The Steel Angel