rate_review Reviews

For heavens sake! I just started reading this, and you leave me hanging on chapter 4. I am truly enjoying this. The humor in your writing is making your story fun. Dialogue is really good--Willy Wonka really sounds true to character, which is adorable. Please, please add chapter 5.

Nicely done.
I can hear the voice of Willy Wonka in your writing, which is excellent.
I hope you update at some point!

OMG! U my dear are a complete genius! Update and write i HAVE TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS!!!!*crazed look on her face* Keep up with the good work.

I agree! Go for it! Your doing great so far. I look forward to more!

Oh please can we have some smut??? *on knees begging*

Wow wow wow! I absolutely enjoyed your story! Willy was so funny in it)) I wonder, what's gonna happen next? ;) Please, go on writing))

OoOooOOOO! I love it so far, but you need to keep writing!

PLEASE UPDATE!! It was really funny when he choked on a moan and when Annebelle asked him how he did it, he thought "Go on. Tell her you choked on a moan while perving over her legs" HAHAHAHA I could just imagine him saying something like that in his head.

HURRY WITH THE NEXT ONE!!!

((Across the hall, Willy came out of his bathroom, drying his hair with a towel. “I only took a shower because I’m a firm believer in personal hygiene,” he told himself. “And I happen to prefer cold water. I was not, repeat not, aroused!”))

I LOVE you for that! Oh and the coma should go after 'repeat' instead of 'not'.
Althou I find it hard to picture Willy Wonka lusting(Not that I don't like it. :P ) I CAN imagine him saying and doing just that. XD
Good job! You're the first person I review since my short stay in this place. Can't wait to read more of your story.

((“Time for another shower I think,” he muttered, trying to sound cheery.))

Just can't wait!

Considering I loved the movie, I never thought I'd actually find fanfiction on it, much less a good one. The moment I saw you named your main character "Annabelle", I thought, "Oh great, another Mary Sue". In many ways she is - you described her as extremely slim and pretty, like most female OCs are. Now, seeing as we don't exactly know how old Willy Wonka is (but know that Johnny Depp is around 42) I think it's a little... unrealistic, shall I say, for him to be interested in someone of only 16. Perhaps if she had been at least 20 it might not have been so bad. Anyway, I digress. This fic is simple and nice, and that's often what makes a good story. You portray Willy Wonka perfectly, and your spelling and grammar is almost flawless (another great aspect - nothing bugs me more than someone who doesn't bother to spellcheck...). Humour is essential to keep the readers interested, and you've put that in too. I like to see where this is going. Keep it up ^_~

~Phantom Panther~