rate_review Reviews

I love this story. Its hot and steamy.

That was quite a story! I can distinctly imagine the lesson taught to that intolerable Vicomte...Erik truly is a genius.

-O. G.

It looks like you edit Lessons In Box 5, and from the looks of your reviews it seems like they aren't much help - some of them anyway.

Advice - I'm sure when you finished this you thought to yourself you could do better. You can, and you will. It's a shame some of these reviews didn't really help you out. Better yet, some of them are really nasty and rude. I know from the looks of it you need help in grammar and spelling. You'll get the hang of it, don't rush when writing, and always remember you'll always get the good and the bad. I think you did rush this a bit and that's fine, we ALL learn from our mistakes.

Look over your work before you send it to your beta because not everyone is perfect and they too can make mistakes. And before you post review it once more.

In the mean time, spell check(which I think you're doing now, after so many people telling you that you can't spell, hell even I can't...) and send your works to your beta or beta(s). They'll tell you that this or that didn't sound good, perhaps you might want to do this instead of that. Listen to their advice, as well as listening to your gutt. You'll get it one of these days. Good Job and KEEP writing.

You know, it's not perfect, but it DOES have potential to be really, really good. You certainly are doing a lot better with this.

It's nice to see you keeping all your comments this time, too, negative AND positive.


^.~ Have a lovely night

Your storyline left me way to perplexed. Just what lessons were supposed to be learned in this story? Seemed to me that Christine knew pretty much everything she was supposively being taught and as for Raoul why is it every phangirl has to make him such an abusive prick? Some people have no imagination. Couldn't have looked up a better Harliquin to use huh?

Okay, this is an insult to Phantom. I mean, most erotic fics themselves are insults to Leroux, but come on. Nothing in here was canon.

What the Hell. Raoul, IS NOT AN ABUSIVE GUY. K? YEAH. So all of you are going on about Erik, which, blackrosephantom, ITS SPELLED WITH A FLIPPING K. LEARN IT.

And during this fic I clutched my stomach and dry heaved.

This is an insult to other writers in this category.

You need to learn about the characters.

Puh-leeze. Anyone can write a sex scene with the SUPER HOT HERO and EVIL VILLAN, and of course, WHORE. This story is nothing special. NOTHING SPECIAL. NOTHING.

(/endrant)

I read your story the first time, you posted it. I think it has improved in that there is better care of the spelling and grammar. The characters seem more fleshed out, although I think that Raoul would not be quite so abusive unless he considered Christine to be a cock tease. I noticed someone reviewed and thought Christine a whore. What I can gather from your story, she and Erik had been together for something like a month, she would be more willing to try anything he suggested and would probably be the more dominant one in the situation.

Not unreadable and some of the smut was hot. A line I particulary liked was the one that went something like this "I want to look in your eyes when I come in side you"

oops I meant that to say, that Erik would be the more dominant one!

I liked it, abusive Raoul needs to be toned down a little, but it was a decent one shot.

The idea behind this story isn't all bad but I just feel maybe you kind of rushed this one. I would suggest taking your time as you type your fictions up and then get a friend to look over it before you go posting it. Your spelling errors basically change the context of your story. I don't think you meant to make Christine a tart.

Looking over some of your other reviews I see some real advice there. Constructive criticism is actually a good thing believe it or not. Always helps to get different reviews.