rate_review Reviews

Please write more! This is very well written; lots of imagery and emotion!

Please, please, PLEASE update. This is one of the best stories on the whole site, and I'm dying for some new material from you. Please?

I like the end! Tell me that's not all of it! Sequel!

I like your Veruca! I didn't like the the turn in the ending though, how out of character for Wonka. A lot of people seem to feel a need to make him "masculine" or brutal, but why not just pick such a character to begin with instead? He really is not, I don't think he ever could be, he could be scary and creepy and merciless, sure, but not brutish or butch like that. But until that turn in the end I appreciated your story. Your Veruca is quite like mine in "Returns and despair".

Beautifully written, you really did an amazing job.

I'm dying to know what happens next!!

L.

Damn! You are right on with your portrayal of Veruca! I find it fascinating that she feels this mixture of anger and desire toward him. Your story is certainly effective, because I REALLY wanted to go kick Veruca's ass all the while I was reading what she was doing to him. I loved the part where she forced him to give her oral pleasure, then thought to herself, "God, where did he learn to do that?"

Write on!

P.S. I can't wait to find out what sweet Willy has in store for Ms. Bitch Cakes!!!

o.O

I do no envy Veruca for the revenge he's about to reek. You just successfully managed to make wonka an even SCARIER person then was displayed in the newer movie. I honestly hadn't thought it possible either. *whistles*

I wonder if he and Charlie are a thing though if he asked about Charlie like that. And what he just might do to her if he is in a coma or something... Anyway yah, interesting story. I don't particularly see how peole like other peoples pain, but I like how she's gonna get her commupence... *grin*

Please tell me there's more. I beg you, it's so good. I almost died when you ended it.