rate_review Reviews

This is a very sweet tale. I absolutely adore Mr. Tumnus, and am also very fond of his portrayal in the movie. In the film version, it did seem to me that, should Lucy grow up, they might fall in love.

So now you've presented me with this! Oh answer to my prayers! It is certainly a good start, however you may want to consider a Beta reader to help with the little mistakes. Also, it isn't quite convincing that Lucy would not go looking for her brothers and sister, and would leave them there after only ten minutes. For now, though, I'm going to help you with this: "Pevensie" not "Prevensie" *grins*

Looking forward to more!

~The Amazing Enthusiasto~

This is a wonderful beginning. I read these books so much when I was little the covers fell off! Lucy has always been my favorite - along with Aslan of course. I'd love for him to put in an appearance. I can't see anyone smuttying him up! - but anything else - I can't wait to see what you do wtih this. You're off to a great start.

Plot! Characterization! Actual story development, and not just people randomly meeting and having sex.

Love it, and definately keep it up.

She waited the Ten Minutes at first before she started to call for them. As she said, something inside her said to avoid it. It is just something that I feel would have happened. It also reads that she didn't actually leave until about twenty minutes after the initial ten, when they had not answered or called to her from the trail. That would make a good half hour for her in her defense.

It was just one of those gut instincts that said don't go. Sometimes even those are more powerful than your urge to follow after your family. I hope you can still enjoy the story, even though you may feel differently about some parts. As for Aslan, he is in my plot bunnies head to make his debute. It would not be Narnia without Aslan.

Anyways thank you all for the reviews. I hope they keep coming as I add chapters to my ideas of what should have happened.


Starfyre

Ah, numminess. Have yet to see the movie, though I've read the series countless times.

Looking forward to seeing where this goes. Keep up the writting.

*sob* how cute! Oh they truly are such a cute couple! I really love your story and i hope my review counts as something and hopefully encourages you to continue. I read it and i love it. Please don't stop. I would be crushed if you did.

All the best and fair writing,

Your #1 Fic Reader,

Earwen/Maeg

You're a very good writer. I've read all the Narnia books and you haven't contradicted anything from the stories. Keep writing. I'm not into beastiality (I'm guessing that's what's coming) but I love your writing style. My heart aches in sympathy for Tumnus.

Wonderfully written! Well done! I have been looking for a Lucy/Tumnus fic forever and I have finally found one! Thank you and please update soon! Don't keep me waiting for more. I'm 19 and i'm only getting older lmao.

Fair Writing!

Eawen/Maegan

With all my warnings, I always put just a few things up. I have always reserved the right to change them as the story goes. I am not exactly sure how to list what I have in mind so I am being ready for anything. I don't wish someone coming back and saying I did not warn them properly about the story.


Thank you very much for the review.


Starfyre