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January 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Beta here. Sorry I've been a bit behind, but work has been rather hectic lately, and using most of my time. I will have the rest of the chapters beta'd and sent back soon, I promise.
And seeing as how someone seems to have stolen my title as number 1 fan and reviewer, I shall henceforth be known as #beta and... um... yeah.
**smiles and waves to Earwen, poofies to do... beta type stuff and... stuff**
And seeing as how someone seems to have stolen my title as number 1 fan and reviewer, I shall henceforth be known as #beta and... um... yeah.
**smiles and waves to Earwen, poofies to do... beta type stuff and... stuff**
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January 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was so sweet, romantic, but not cheesy! Don't stop writing - I'm already loving reading about these "shadow" Pevensies. And I want to know what happens with the little boy, the guy in the purple robes and I want to see Aslan kick his brother's ass!
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January 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
please, please continue this. i love it!!!. i always thought lucy and tumnus should be together. I wsh someone would write a aslan/original femal story.
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January 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This story is sweet and hot and amazing, and I must have more now!!! *fangirls you*
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January 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i've only read to chapter six (i wish i'd started when you began posting!), but great work with an actual story going on here! my only gripe (and a small, petty one it is, too) is that lucy and tumnus keep saying "okay." now i guess it is possible that i've completely forgotton this bit of slang from the books (don't have them on hand, unfortunately), but i really don't think tumnus would use the word. lucy -might-... but... i think 'alright' is a better choice... anyway, considering that's the only thing i can fault, EXCELLENT WORK!!!
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January 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I love the direction your going in - it's new and it's different. And now I'm dying of curiosity just to know what the hell is going on with Peter or if it really is Peter. Does that help lift your funk?! :)
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January 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I had actually considered that when writing and at the time I didn't know how to explain it. He uses Okay because Lucy does. Just as she has picked up on some of his little habits. You know how old couples can be. To me it adds a sense of realism because that is a fault in everyone. We always pick up on each others little quirks and start using them our selves.
I hope this explains it better. Thank you for the review though. I appreciate it very much.
Starfyre
I hope this explains it better. Thank you for the review though. I appreciate it very much.
Starfyre
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January 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oaky, everything seems to make sense and such, but then you come up with this guy in purple robes and a kid. Is that a mistake, as I couldn't see it fitting as a flashback? Though, if it's a foreshadowing of something to come, well, should be interesting to see where it goes.
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January 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
WOOT! Lucy and Tumnus have become naughty lol. This chapter rocked with dear Lucy helping Kale (did i spell that right? im terrible with names) and then the whole spinning and realizing that everyone was there for her! Naughty Aslan's brother, i have a feeling i won;t much like him. lol OHHH this story always keeps me at wits end and it will be the death of me i swear!
Update soon!
Fair Writing,
Earwen/Maeg
^___^
Update soon!
Fair Writing,
Earwen/Maeg
^___^
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January 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
and hte plot thickens an intresting way for a first attack although i do wonder what cats aslan will be gatheringand of course tumnus got some more booty lol which is always good