rate_review Reviews

Hey great story i came

This reads more like a synopsis; the kind of notes one makes when initially thinking out a story or chapter. There is no plot to speak of, your tenses are dreadful, there are misspellings, and why, oh, freaking why, do people write incest stories that don't address the fact that these people are related? This could be any random couple. This could have been an okay one-shot PWP, but it wasn't even fleshed out enough for that, and the sex was boring. Sorry, but next time, think it over a little more and be aware of grammar, tenses, etc.

to short

you really need to get your tenses right.

hmmm

omg this is so cute i love it good work on it

Well...It's pretty good, but it seemed to happen too fast. Maybe you could work on a bit of a plot?

I can see where this is heading, but go on anyways.