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June 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Truely a wonderful chapter. I eagerly await the next.
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June 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
A truely wonderful story, my dear. I cannot wait for the next installments.
~Lucia
~Lucia
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June 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
"She caught a glimpse of his loins" that phrase killed me (in a good way). Although I'm a Leroux purist when it comes to Erik, I realize yours is Gerard Butler based (and that is not a problem, he's a sinfully delectable piece of eye candy), so the bathing au natural works; Leroux's Erik would be too inhibited I believe. I do like his invitation to Marianne, a reminder of Erik's wit and humor from the novel; nice blend of genres/characterizations for that scene.
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June 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Your Story is beautifully written and I enjoyed reading these first five chapters. Please update soon, I am dying to know what happens next.
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June 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I've held off reviewing, but now after five chapters, I thought I'd leave some thoughts. First; your story is well written and I got a good mental image of the French countryside and the estates, (I love good visuals) but for some reason, I'm not connecting with the characters, especially Marianne. She comes across as an independent 21st century woman, and that pulls me out of the story. A Victorian era lady, especially a duchess, I believe, would behave with cool civility, even when in the company of someone she hated. I realize she is supposed to be young and headstrong, (the counterpart to the somewhat daft and naive Christine) but I have yet to warm up to her.
My other main issue is conflict; there really isn't any. Yes, Erik and Marianne have gotten off on the wrong foot, but I keep waiting for something to happen, other than the I hate you/I'm drawn to you thing. After the first few chapters, I was intrigued at the possibilities. For instance; a duchess, expected to marry a baron; do they already know Raoul, the viscount? I was hoping for an extremely uncomfortable dinner or garden party with the de Chagneys being introduced to Marianne's new neighbor (could you imagine?) Also, the Dante reference. Has Erik built a new torture chamber in his estate, modeled after the nine circles of hell? Will one of the de Chagneys find themselves there (you said the story was not Christine friendly); will Marianne act as Erik's Beatrice, or will she be seduced by darkness and help him get his revenge? That's what I mean by conflict.
I'll keep reading; I'm interested to see where this might go.
My other main issue is conflict; there really isn't any. Yes, Erik and Marianne have gotten off on the wrong foot, but I keep waiting for something to happen, other than the I hate you/I'm drawn to you thing. After the first few chapters, I was intrigued at the possibilities. For instance; a duchess, expected to marry a baron; do they already know Raoul, the viscount? I was hoping for an extremely uncomfortable dinner or garden party with the de Chagneys being introduced to Marianne's new neighbor (could you imagine?) Also, the Dante reference. Has Erik built a new torture chamber in his estate, modeled after the nine circles of hell? Will one of the de Chagneys find themselves there (you said the story was not Christine friendly); will Marianne act as Erik's Beatrice, or will she be seduced by darkness and help him get his revenge? That's what I mean by conflict.
I'll keep reading; I'm interested to see where this might go.