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October 9, 2014 at 12:00 AM
it is a very nice story! please continue it!
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December 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I do like...very much. I hope that this is a story that will be finished one day soon...it's too lovely of a beginning not to be brought to fruition.
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September 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
damn, i hope this get updated pretty freaking fast. i really love the cliffhanger, but it is the deadly kind.
PLEASE UPDATE VERY, VERY SOON?!
PLEASE UPDATE VERY, VERY SOON?!
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April 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
please continue this!
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February 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hmm intresting concept. I like it so far can't wait to see how things turn out. Update soon.
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February 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter One: This is a promising start and I'd be interested to see where the story goes. One caveat - do you have a spell checker? It would help with the spelling details to some extent.
Now I want to know what happens to Wendy next. Captain Hook is very sexy - lucky you to have him in a dream. I assume you're a Jason Isaacs fan. 8-)
Now I want to know what happens to Wendy next. Captain Hook is very sexy - lucky you to have him in a dream. I assume you're a Jason Isaacs fan. 8-)
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February 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I REALLY HOPE this is the opening chapter of a longer story (if not then you should definitely change the rating) I liked it- it gives us a good sense of Wendy's feelings and why she's back in Neverland without being too specific. I would suggest you find yourself a beta reader for your spelling though- there are a few glaring errors which really disrupted the flow of your sentences. Try AFF's yahoo group- there should be a link at the bottom of the main page. Alternatively feel free to email me as I'm a beta reader as well as an author.