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for Misplaced Affections

by Moonstalk

schedule May 11, 2010 at 12:00 AM
So far I'm really enjoying this story for the characterizations, but I'm hoping the pace will pick up in the next chapter.
person The Unknown User
schedule July 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey this is a great start to a story. I can't wait for more!!
schedule July 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This looks like the start of a good story. I'm interested in seeing where you go with this, and I can't wait to see how the birthday party will go. :D
person ChaosProphet
schedule July 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
im captivated, please write more. my only criticism is that there was no dialogue in this chapter, just narration. i understand that the first chapter is where the plot and characters are set up, but keep dialogue in mind for chapter two. id luuuuuuuuuurve to read a back-and-forth between a confused, adolescent charlie and a barely-restrained wonka. yummyness.... so yeah, more chapters!!!
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