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for Jas

by awcoppelia

schedule April 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is a wonderful story! I am glad I found it here, I think I first read this on another sight. I hope you can let your fingers run away with you more here though. I look forward to more of this.
person Aresy
schedule January 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is original and interesting fanfic. I usualy dont like new characters, but this didnt bother me hehe. :P It just really hard to read because you put everything together. Yes, i can tell its not all one large paragraph, but when someone is talking its much better to separate that into its own space, also if there is something new going on, its good to break the paragraph; otherwise, its hard visually to look at because the paragraphs are so long. So, I know that sounds weird, but organization does count.
person Anon
schedule November 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like this. The interaction between the two is very nice. Write more, pretty please? :D
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