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please update its really good and i want to see Erik have his way with Raoul.

Welcome to the twisted paths of E/R slash! As you've probably noticed, you have not chosen the easiest pairing. Many people will never understand how those two can fit together, and they will frequently tell you so. But you and I and a couple of other authors know different. We know that Erik and Raoul fit together, as long as they're portrayed in the right way. And I can tell that you're on the way to making a very fine portrayal indeed. I like your setting, and you have a very nice style. There's just one thing I have to criticise, and I've done so quite a few times before: In a story taking place in the 19th century, it is better to avoid the words "prick" and "cock" (unless you're talking about farm animals, that is). They didn't exist in such a way back then, and they don't fit into your otherwise very good vocabulary. So please consider using "manhood" and "member" in your next chapter, and you'll make me very happy.

great story so far.. I hope to read more from you soon.

Ok where to start…

Welcome to the club of those of us who have not read the book. (In my case I have a few copies of Leroux book (different translations) But I have yet to read any of them.)

“But, if you are merely looking for some smut, you may enjoy!” Ok I took your advice. I enjoyed it.

I like how you are showing things from both Erik and Raoul’s prospectives.
And the way you wrote about the little agonies passing over his face. (That was great!)

Plus the way you wrote this actually made me feel the pain that Raoul was feeling. And also the awe and excitement Erik felt as he watched Raoul masturbate.

I can’t wait for your next chapter. Please post more soon.

BCM

Very nice. I like how this is written. Feels like so much more than a pwp!