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I can't wait for you to update :)

Juat so you know: "Vous êtes bienvenu, maintenant venu dessus laisse aller" does not say what you want it to. Online translators take the language you are writing in and then change it to the formal words used in the language you seek. What she should have said: "De rien, maintenant, allons-y!" Just a tip for you in future writing: you may want to learn something of the second language (or have someone who knows it check your work) if you intend to use it and not just italicize or otherwise note it.

please update

I like what you've written so far. I'm really intrigued by the idea of Jasper and Alice having a relationship with a girl. Threesomes are difficult to develope because of the amount of trust and attraction that must be shared by all participants. There are many ways for a relationship like this to come about and I'm interested in seeing how you bring them together. Alice was a character I really loved in the books, but I also found myself pulled in by Jasper's personality and history. It's not hard to imagine a girl being drawn not just to each as an individual but also together as a couple. You write very well, and I hope to read more in the future. :)

This story is pretty good so far. I can't wait to see what comes next! I would appreciate it if you could keep me updated on when you post more. My email address is dragonfire10514@yahoo.com. Really great job!

Please write more, I really like the story. I've been looking for a plot like this one for a while and this is the only one I could find! Please continue writing!

I like what you've started here. Alice is my favorite Cullen, so seeing someone interested in her is nice. I thought you might like a gentle prod to post more, if your muse agrees.

This is a darling story. It's so interesting. I love it and can't wait to read more.
I hope you get lots of inspiration bunnies to nibble on you. XD And good luck with all the editing and re-writing. Difficult stuffs, I know.
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Yeah, let me know when this gets updated, it's really great so far! I can't wait to read more.

I love this!!! Update Soon please! :)