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This right here is the problem with reviews that only say its awesome update soon. Few things you need to work on... fist... the New Zeland Vernacular. I fully understand if your from there I'm sure its 100% readable... if your not it gives you a headache. Please reference trying to read a cockney accent. Its not just a new way of speaking its a new freaking language. Second you have facts so backwards about the world this really needs to be a complete AU. Talamarine was not fighting Narnia until LONG PAST the Golden Age of Narnia. Granted yes there were other kingdoms as we see in A Horse and His Boy. But Talamarine did not come to be a threat much less come to be aggressive until LONG after the fall of the Kings and Queens of Narnia. Hence the bafflement of Peter et al at the war in Prince Caspian. I'm not saying it's horrid or beyond hope only... IT NEEDS FIXING! Put the AU warning up with the appropriate changes listed and lighten up on a vernacular most AFF readers won't understand.

Sounds good so far, please continue. What's going to happen between Peter and Nik?!

Oh this is a goody so far. So Peter's after a wife eh ? But why can't Nik go home ?

Oooh!! This is a really good story! Has great potential, please update soon.... :D

I like Nik's tough-girl character, she suits Peter well

Love it I cant wait for the next chapter