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by JaceDamian23

person Suki
schedule June 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
creative.
schedule April 27, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Idea is good.

You could work on your grammar and general... wording.

There were many, many mistakes and you used the wrong words in places.

Consider finding someone to review your work before publishing it.
person Tygerlily
schedule April 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
First I apologize for not being signed in. This story was so cute, and quite clever. I really enjoyed it. I've absolutely no idea why it only has three stars. Do NOT let that get you down. I'd actually love to see more with this, even though its a cute short standalone piece. Very clever idea mixing the blood and chocolate. Hope to see more from this and you soon.

Tyger x
schedule July 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
XD XD XD
Oh, man, that was hilarious! Good job!
schedule July 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I loved this...such a good twist LOL...Poor Emmett!
person luvhp
schedule July 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Cute story, a couple of grammatical errors, I can overlook those for a fun story like this!!!
I'm glad Bella won :)
So, uh...does it end there, or does he, doesn'the??? Guess we'll find out!
Off to check out the next chapter of New Moon (I'm so far behind)
person salenkaiba
schedule June 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
hey!

soooo cool! :-) I loved it.
are you going to write a sequel? it could be fun .. maybe another bet between Bella and the vampires?
I think you have lots of imagination. you should make a serie about it. More ;-)
see ya soon!
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