rate_review Reviews

It was great!

I think this was cheesy but also strangely hot. I like the innocence that you kept to it, and the descriptions of Wendy and Peter. I feel the innocent thing is how Peter and Wendy should be. People who write them like they know what they are doing, that doesn't make sense. I think you started out with that feeling very well.

Is there going to be more?

That was like a cheesy B movie/porno, very BAD acting, and Virgins would never act like that, let alone say "Hmm curious" while touching themselves. She was acting as if she had never washed herself before. And peter was acting like he had never been hard before. I have a five year old who gets hard every morning and sticks his hands down his pants even though I tell him to stop and that he shouldn't do it. So why wouldnt a ...how old is he sposed to be? 12-15? Anyways im sure that a boy that old would know about their junk getting hard by now, never heard of morning wood? And a Virgin girl isnt going to pull a guy ontop of them saying "I need you now!" and peter definitely wouldn't have known where to stick it considering he had never seen a female before wendy had come to the island. You get what im saying? Very badly written and very poorly thought out. I understand if its just some two second smut you wrote out without thinking, but i like a good story with my smut thank you.