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You CAN'T STOP THERE!!!! I NEED to know what happens next!!!! I actually screamed out loud when Jane walked in. Everything was going so smoothly and then that happens?! Come on!!! I really gotta know. 

great story!i had an idea, i don't know where yo are going with the volturi in this story, but mabye you could have the cullens overthrow or at least keep the voltouri out of the americas or go to war with them you know something along those lines. this could happen because the cullens are becoming quite large with the help of the wolves, the denali's,some of the other clans that came to the help of them in breaking dawn, and posibley help from a source not mentioned (perhaps the true werewolves)they could do it. well it's just an idea. keep on writing!

ohhhh gad... why didn't you tell me you were absolutely phenomenally amazing!?!?! This story is fantastic!! You write it perfectly! The passion and emotion... perfect.. I'll be reading this one to the end!

You certainly have talent, but I'm afraid I just couldn't finish reading the story. I would LOVE to help you fine tune the spelling & punctuation in this. I believe your readership would increase exponentially if the story were laid out properly for print. I was an English major, and I have done more than my share of copy editing. Please contact me at "ysar(at)mail.com" if you would like my help. Personally, it would be a lot of fun for me!

I really think this is a great story and your writing definitely has potential! It would be a pity to leave it in this awful shape (which it is, you cannot deny that ;-) ) because I don't think many people will read and appreciate your work this way.
If you want (you can check out my stories beforehand) I can proof-read the story for you and make it "more easily readable". I'm no native speaker of English, but you'll see in my writing that I'm not exactly bad.
Just e-mail your story to zicke0605@vorsicht-bissig.de if you are interested. I'd really be willing to help!