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by katherineGomm

schedule February 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Commas.
Capitalization.
Speech goes like this:
"I think it might rain," he said.
"I think I agree," she agreed, looking out the window. "It's windy, too."
New speaker, new line.
Again, capitalization.
Re-read your story before posting. Spell checking is not enough. A spell checker will not notice the error in the phrase "He piqued my up after school."
Betas are nice, but it's also useful to sleep on a story and then re-read it the next day.
You will get more readers if the words in your summary are spelled correctly. Seeing a sloppily written summary does not give us much hope for the story.

Being forced to write in school is supposed to teach you these things. It's not a burden. Enjoy it. (Polish this up, turn it in, see what happens! School can be fun if you make it!)
schedule February 19, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I love that version of their honeymoon. It is a great story keep up the good work.
person ReddTwilight
schedule January 7, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Really excellant! God i wish i was Bella sometimes! Very good job! Keep it up!

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schedule January 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Perfect, perfect, perfect! I love Twilight as much as the next person, but after 3 1/2 books, I was hoping for a more detailed description of their honeymoon. Good job!