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January 31, 2011 at 12:00 AM
delicious sequel! I already left ar eview but my internet decided to be crap...
the kiss was delicious. yum! I hope there is more! I almost wanted there to be more James/Edward, but I can see that James wanted Edward to want him. I hope there is smut in part 3...I like how you characterized Jasper. =D
My only critical comment is that you should clarify more that the gun did not kill James. That confused me. I thought it had, so why did the gun shot go off and then James was only unconscious? And couldn't James just barrel through the locked door by force?
I would've rather thought the boys would've tossed James into the pit ad buried him alive...but that would've been too harsh perhaps.
the kiss was delicious. yum! I hope there is more! I almost wanted there to be more James/Edward, but I can see that James wanted Edward to want him. I hope there is smut in part 3...I like how you characterized Jasper. =D
My only critical comment is that you should clarify more that the gun did not kill James. That confused me. I thought it had, so why did the gun shot go off and then James was only unconscious? And couldn't James just barrel through the locked door by force?
I would've rather thought the boys would've tossed James into the pit ad buried him alive...but that would've been too harsh perhaps.
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February 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
i read this story and the other one, i liked both of them. you write well.