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March 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Aww... That was so sweet and romantic. I can't wait for the next chapter!!!
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March 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Very nice chapter. I like how you have them both so desperate but at the same time holding back, it really helps to show how much they truly desire each other, and not just lust desire, but real desire to be with each other. I can't wait to see where you take this.
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March 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
It's really, really good so far. I can get the idea of what you're trying to say and definitely of what you're trying to convey to the readers through the characters. Like you said, just the spelling errors. Do you have a beta???
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March 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Getting better. :) this was a great chapter thank you!
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March 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
this was a great chapter, but she sure is mad now lol who could blame the girl.
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March 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I think it's starting out good, kind of short chapters. Lots of spelling errors and hard to read at times. Most people use quotations when people are talking and italics when they are thinking, so thats hard to decipher until I got used to it. I do like the story tho and hope you continue.
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March 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I like this story.
Very good begining.
Captivating.
Very good begining.
Captivating.