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for Just Breathe

by SamanthLeopard

schedule July 7, 2009 at 12:00 AM
wow this is good so far i like it, i hope you continue writing this
schedule June 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
wow....great job so far...I hope you continue!!
schedule April 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wow... Just... Wow. I'm a huge Jacob fan and felt that he just didn't get the love he deserved. :( I'd love to read more and I think that you stick with Bella's personality excellently.

TEAM JACOB!
schedule March 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Nice. My only suggestion would be to re-write the quoted parts, it's your story, take charge! There's one place where you have 'we' instead of 'he,' but other than that grammar and spelling look a-ok. Now my only problem is gonna be keeping 'Just Breathe' and 'Breathe Again' separate in my head!