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April 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
this story is absolutely amazing. keep the updates coming!!!
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April 5, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Serious review this time.
The reason I like your fanfic is that you actually give Isabella a brain. I read the Twilight series and can't say I'm a fan at all. The series was like a uppercut to the Feminist movement. This fic was recommended to me by a friend and I kind of rolled my eyes at first but this is really good. I think in the book Bella was too fawning over Edward and seemed to forget she was her own person with her own thoughts and feelings-- a separate entity from Edward and his wishes. You're doing really well showing how possessive Edward is in a sense, don't do this Bella, go here Bella, you're only a poor weak fragile human Bella...yada yada. Chapter 11, where she yanks her hand from Edwards and reminds him she isn't a possession. I loved it!
The reason I like your fanfic is that you actually give Isabella a brain. I read the Twilight series and can't say I'm a fan at all. The series was like a uppercut to the Feminist movement. This fic was recommended to me by a friend and I kind of rolled my eyes at first but this is really good. I think in the book Bella was too fawning over Edward and seemed to forget she was her own person with her own thoughts and feelings-- a separate entity from Edward and his wishes. You're doing really well showing how possessive Edward is in a sense, don't do this Bella, go here Bella, you're only a poor weak fragile human Bella...yada yada. Chapter 11, where she yanks her hand from Edwards and reminds him she isn't a possession. I loved it!
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April 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Yay an update. Oooo looks like Jaspers thoughts are blocked to Edward only when Bella is around. I love how you wrote Edwar it was so perfectly....Edward lol. I cant wait for more please update again very soon.
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April 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Once again, great chapter. I hope you keep going with this story.
Update soon
Update soon
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April 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
poor edward. bella's really hurting his feelings! D:
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April 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
omygawsh, i love this story. it's not like any of the others i've read, its unusual and new. but it Holds My attention! Thank you to the author, and i'm looking forward to the next chapters to come!
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April 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
*GASPS*
Oh my freaking crap, that was AWESOME!!!! First off, I love how she's tired of Wuthering Heights, even though it's her favorite. I think it represents Edward and her moving away from him. Second, that was such a cool twist that Edward couldn't hear Jasper temporarily. I thought it would last longer; too bad for him. It would've been perfect for him to be able to keep his new feelings/internal conflicts from Edward. But WOW Edward really over-reacted and made completely wrong connections when trying to piece things together. Wrong secret!
But OMG it's sooo good!! Please update ASAP!
Oh my freaking crap, that was AWESOME!!!! First off, I love how she's tired of Wuthering Heights, even though it's her favorite. I think it represents Edward and her moving away from him. Second, that was such a cool twist that Edward couldn't hear Jasper temporarily. I thought it would last longer; too bad for him. It would've been perfect for him to be able to keep his new feelings/internal conflicts from Edward. But WOW Edward really over-reacted and made completely wrong connections when trying to piece things together. Wrong secret!
But OMG it's sooo good!! Please update ASAP!
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April 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Best story ever, u have to keep it coming i get on here every day when i get off work to see if it's updated yet! not many people are into the jasper bella thing but i LOVE IT!!!! and ur writing totally keeps the interest up!
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April 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I love your story! You do such a great job with your character development. I can't wait for the next instalment! Thanks!
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April 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Ok, first, whenever I get halfway down the page (scroll bar-wise) I get upset that I'm halfway through with the new chapter. Second, this story is just so...amazing. At the very end of each chapter, I'm always wanting more! This last chapter (10) was great. I feel bad for Edward because I want Jasper to love Bella and vice versa. But then, I'd feel bad for Jasper if Bella stayed with Edward. I really think you are doing a great job establishing a relationship between Bella and Jasper. And I'm anxious to see where you take Bella and Edward (and how you do it). Great work! Don't make us wait too long!