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August 9, 2009 at 12:00 AM
OK, where's the rest of the story? Please update soon! I love the way you let us see everyone's thoughts, most stories I've read don't let us inside Emmett's or Rosalie's head. And I loved all of Alice's confessions in that last chapter! I do love Alice, she's the best. I'm really looking forward to your take on the wedding - and the honeymoon...
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August 8, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Good start to the story, I think I'm already hooked! (Just read Ch. 1.)
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August 8, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Love the dream in Ch. 5 and its resolution when Edward returns and reassures her.
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August 8, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Just read Ch. 7, still loving it!
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August 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wow, Alice is so underapreciated. I loved last chapter too, dirty minded Edward is always fun. Hehe.
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August 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
YAY alice is so funny ^^ Loved the chapter X) Cant wait to read the next one !!!!!!!! ED & Bella please ahuahuahau *dirty mind* =p
observation:
SORRY! T_T but i was writting so fast on the last review that i didn't post the correction right.. yeah i'm stupid... i'm so sorry for that -.-
anyway:
"Quero A vida sempre assim
Com voce perto de mim
E eu que era TRISTE
DESCRENTE deste mundo
Ao encontrar voce eu conheci
O que é a felicidade, meu amor"
man i am useless.. really sorry for not making it right the firt time! (only noticed today, while re-reading the chapie "last night 3")
Again: LOVE YOU FANFIC!! please keep up the wonderfull work! =^.^=
observation:
SORRY! T_T but i was writting so fast on the last review that i didn't post the correction right.. yeah i'm stupid... i'm so sorry for that -.-
anyway:
"Quero A vida sempre assim
Com voce perto de mim
E eu que era TRISTE
DESCRENTE deste mundo
Ao encontrar voce eu conheci
O que é a felicidade, meu amor"
man i am useless.. really sorry for not making it right the firt time! (only noticed today, while re-reading the chapie "last night 3")
Again: LOVE YOU FANFIC!! please keep up the wonderfull work! =^.^=
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August 3, 2009 at 12:00 AM
OMG!!!! Ive loved this chappie ^^ XDDD it's sooo sexy without beeing vulgar xDDD and soooo roamntic , sweet.. kyaaa x))
anyway just one tip, about the brazilian portuguese song(i'am brazilian yay ^^), the grammar is kinda wrong:
"Quero vida sempre asim
Com voca perto de mim
E eu que era trista
Descente deste mundo
Ao encontra voca eu conheci
O que a felicidade, meu amor"
correcting:
"Quero vida sempre ASSIM
Com VOCE perto de mim
E eu que era trista
Descente deste mundo ..> i couldn't understand well what you wanted on this line( the right away translation would be: ***********************************"descent from this world" O_o)
Ao ENCONTRAR VOCE eu conheci
O que a felicidade, meu amor"..> on this line i think you wanted to have "O que é a felicidade, meu amor"
Wonderfull job on this fic!!!! it's AMAZING the way you describe actions and thoughts ^^ i'am really looking forward to the next chappie ò_ó!!!! XDD *begging* please uptade soon >_<
anyway just one tip, about the brazilian portuguese song(i'am brazilian yay ^^), the grammar is kinda wrong:
"Quero vida sempre asim
Com voca perto de mim
E eu que era trista
Descente deste mundo
Ao encontra voca eu conheci
O que a felicidade, meu amor"
correcting:
"Quero vida sempre ASSIM
Com VOCE perto de mim
E eu que era trista
Descente deste mundo ..> i couldn't understand well what you wanted on this line( the right away translation would be: ***********************************"descent from this world" O_o)
Ao ENCONTRAR VOCE eu conheci
O que a felicidade, meu amor"..> on this line i think you wanted to have "O que é a felicidade, meu amor"
Wonderfull job on this fic!!!! it's AMAZING the way you describe actions and thoughts ^^ i'am really looking forward to the next chappie ò_ó!!!! XDD *begging* please uptade soon >_<
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July 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Awww!!! More please?! I love it!!
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July 28, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Phew! Is it hot in here? Please, please update soon, I can't wait for the wedding night and for the happy reunion of Alice and Jasper! This story is brilliant!
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July 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
So I just started reading this and I love it!!! I also love that you used Sekhmet(or the idea of her) in this story. I actually have Sekhmet tattooed on my back in hieroglyphs...so when I read that it made me smile :D So I hope you update soon!! I can't wait to read more!!