rate_review Reviews

Whew, glad the confusion was settled. I figured there might have been a mistake in posting since I'm reading your other story as well and recognized the chapters.

i did enjoy this story and i loved that you started off doing your own twist on the books even though it ended up pretty much the same which is also ok. my only criticism is that everything seems a bit rushed. i know sometimes i have to go back and check what i've written because i get into the flow and then realise it could do with a bit more filling out. it just feels like once you get to the bella's pregnant and the cullen's find out about it part its bella's in trouble, edward comes in, bella has the baby, happy ending. do you know what i mean? i did enjoy the story though good job

This story was really good, and you did a really good job on it. I hope you could read mine; just to see if I did anything wrong to it.

I'm confused. The last two chapters are from your other story. The jump ahead in time, without any explanation of how the Volturi got involved in this one it makes no sense, specially when you consider that Edward was there for Nessie's birth in this one, so he would have been there for her change. Not sure how you're going to merge the two.

it seems like there's something missing. chapter 15 ended with bella in labor, and chapter 16 started with Nessie's thoughts. Your flow of the story seems to be off. You need to have something bridge the two totally different stories, really. as of what I remember from chapter 15, bella and edward hadn't even reconciled and you have them being happy loving mom and dad to Nessie. We all know how her birth in Breaking Dawn worked, but how did it go in your story? is that when Bella was turned, or was it later? You don't answer these questions.

Awww your story is so good! I love it! It's becoming one of my favorites! Was kinda funny how Bella ran from Edward when he sort of proposed, though I wouldn't consider that exactly proposing. I can't wait until you add another chapter!

I love this story, and how it's going so far. I loved how you showed Bella being honest with Edward about how she feels about him, and the way she talks to the family in the story. It's really good that you describe the emotions of each and every member of the family. I hope you update soon, because I would love to see somemore of you story.

I definitely want you to continue. This story is great, especially now that Carlisle got involved and will probably soon find out what's really going on. :)

I really like this story, even though the chapters are very short. I love how Emmett yelled her name, I just love him. :)
It's getting to that point where she needs blood and not food, how's a wolf-baby going to explain that? lol