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January 21, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Roflmao -- if you only knew ... oh wait, that's only geldings. Stallions usually don't require, geez, never mind. Just never mind. Don't go there, mind. Don't go there, dammit.
Only you, JayDee, could make me read a virgin girl/horse story and like it! I liked her innocence, and his reactions. Thank the gods real horses can't talk ...
PW the disturbed
Only you, JayDee, could make me read a virgin girl/horse story and like it! I liked her innocence, and his reactions. Thank the gods real horses can't talk ...
PW the disturbed
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January 20, 2011 at 12:00 AM
That's a great use of the sand theme, and the idea of sand being stuck in the genitals is bad enough even without it being trapped inside and rubbing like mad. You made it clear that Bree wouldn't have asked for help if not for the torture. Then the stallion's excitement, and sneakiness, was perfect after she improvised so wonderfully. You did a great job with the imagery, pithy and clear.
I like the mix of naiveté and arousal on her part. It seemed like a good mix because she was getting her first taste (pun intended) of experiences that are so primal yet she'd been forced to repress for so long. It was a bit of a release for her too, and the idea that she wants another "drink" afterwards was shockingly funny. "Certainly!"
Let's hope they find some water so he doesn't get too dehydrated and that her mouth doesn't go dry. (Well, he'll make sure it doesn't I suppose.) Then imagine what will happen when she finally learns the truth about what she did.
By the way, when I first saw the title I thought, for a fleeting moment, that the story was going to be about a horse and a rooster. Then I laughed and imagined that if that was the case then the rooster would probably be wielding a chainsaw.
I like the mix of naiveté and arousal on her part. It seemed like a good mix because she was getting her first taste (pun intended) of experiences that are so primal yet she'd been forced to repress for so long. It was a bit of a release for her too, and the idea that she wants another "drink" afterwards was shockingly funny. "Certainly!"
Let's hope they find some water so he doesn't get too dehydrated and that her mouth doesn't go dry. (Well, he'll make sure it doesn't I suppose.) Then imagine what will happen when she finally learns the truth about what she did.
By the way, when I first saw the title I thought, for a fleeting moment, that the story was going to be about a horse and a rooster. Then I laughed and imagined that if that was the case then the rooster would probably be wielding a chainsaw.