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And I spelled Renesmee wrong in my review. Whoops!

Ah, I had to retype my review, AFF ate it! I do not have the patience to be quite so eloquent in singing my praises the second time around, but I assure you that I greatly enjoyed reading this story, and hope to see it completed! I made a few notes, in chapters 18 and 19, you used the term "feminine wiles," but you spelled it "whiles," both times. Also chapter 37 is a duplicate of 36, and 38 is titled as 40. I am shocked that there are so few reviews on this piece. (How annoying that I lost my first review, it was very long.) I like how you changed the characters to fit their setting, though somehow managed to keep their personalities as they would be for the setting, rather than uprooting them and sticking them somewhere else. Though perhaps it is just name recognition... aside from Renesmee, who was a blank slate.

I give up! I lose one, post the unnecessary one, and then anon the third. Ugh. Sheesh, AFF, I'm only trying to post a nice review. Love the fic, keep it up!

really good

My god, this is beautiful. I know it's Twlight Fanfic, but the characters and setting, are so distinct from their novelized counterparts that they could be anyone. Your writing is perfect for fanfiction, just enough detail and description to set the mood, while still keeping action flowing at a pace that kept me gripped. Please don't stop updating this, I am eagerly awaiting the next chapter.

please update soon!