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January 6, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I read your other stories a long time ago but I have sporadically checked your page for anything new. I totally went ”wheeee!” when I saw there was a new story with 4 chapters already. There is not enough good quality Raistlin & Crysania stories to read, so I’m definitely going to follow this one. I’m also a bit hopeful that we might see Caramon in this story at some point. He and Raist have such an interesting dynamic and you write it very well (even if it is not going ot be twincest in this story, cough).
You are very good at writing the different characters with a voice of their own. Raistlin is by far the most interesting to me (especially loved the small moments of him being sarcastic!) so I’m really looking forwards to more of him. Another thing I enjoy is how you use small things like the weather or little sounds and smells, to set the mood and make the environment more alive.
Thanks for a great read and waiting for more!
You are very good at writing the different characters with a voice of their own. Raistlin is by far the most interesting to me (especially loved the small moments of him being sarcastic!) so I’m really looking forwards to more of him. Another thing I enjoy is how you use small things like the weather or little sounds and smells, to set the mood and make the environment more alive.
Thanks for a great read and waiting for more!
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January 4, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I've just read chapters 2-4 and I'm SO into this. You are really taking your time in establishing these characters and the plot. As much as I can't wait for that first moment when Crysania realizes Raistlin is back(which I'm sure will be angsty and twisted and awesome), I'm also thrilled with seeing your view of what life is like in Palanthas for ordinary folk and the backstabbing politics in the church. The reasons for Raistlin's headaches and his mysterious visitor at the inn from chapter 2 haven't been revealed yet....can't wait to find out WTF is going on!
I think your writing shines especialy in the small character-driven moments, like Raistlin's description of finding the Key of Knowledge and his awareness of his own numerous and profound flaws. This is no small part of Raistlin's appeal (to me at least)- he's perfectly aware of his own failings. It makes those rare moments of his self-deceit especially intriguing.
Chapter 4 was really special. Araminta Averell is a fantastic addition. Thank you so frickin' much for having a REAL conversation between two female characters in a story! As I mentioned in my last review, I was especially hoping you'd explore this story from Crysania's viewpoint as well and I was NOT disappointed. Crysania was such an interesting character and I never felt that the dragonlance authors really gave her enough time or attention - I think hearing your version of her reasons behind joining the church is going to fascinating.
The only suggestion I can offer is that the switch between Araminta's and Crysania's points of view during Chapter 4 was slightly awkward. Both of their view points were excellently written, but the change from Crysania to Araminta then back to Crysania wasn't as smooth as it could be. That being said, I wouldn't have wanted a single sentence less, only a more clear break between the two.
Finally, I have to mention how much I loved how you ended that chapter - "How she missed sunsets, and dark plumes of smoke above rooftops". Evocative and beautiful. CHILLS. Please keep going with this!
I think your writing shines especialy in the small character-driven moments, like Raistlin's description of finding the Key of Knowledge and his awareness of his own numerous and profound flaws. This is no small part of Raistlin's appeal (to me at least)- he's perfectly aware of his own failings. It makes those rare moments of his self-deceit especially intriguing.
Chapter 4 was really special. Araminta Averell is a fantastic addition. Thank you so frickin' much for having a REAL conversation between two female characters in a story! As I mentioned in my last review, I was especially hoping you'd explore this story from Crysania's viewpoint as well and I was NOT disappointed. Crysania was such an interesting character and I never felt that the dragonlance authors really gave her enough time or attention - I think hearing your version of her reasons behind joining the church is going to fascinating.
The only suggestion I can offer is that the switch between Araminta's and Crysania's points of view during Chapter 4 was slightly awkward. Both of their view points were excellently written, but the change from Crysania to Araminta then back to Crysania wasn't as smooth as it could be. That being said, I wouldn't have wanted a single sentence less, only a more clear break between the two.
Finally, I have to mention how much I loved how you ended that chapter - "How she missed sunsets, and dark plumes of smoke above rooftops". Evocative and beautiful. CHILLS. Please keep going with this!
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October 20, 2012 at 12:00 AM
HAPPY CLAPS!!!! When I saw you had added this new story I can't tell you how excited I was.....I think this time period has so much potential for you to play in and you've already come up with something amazing. I always have loved how you write Raistlin's point of view, very much how I think he would have sounded in Dragonlance if they didn't need to write for a much younger audience.
The scene of the gods removing Raistlin's magic was especially excellent. And I loved the reasoning for returning Raistlin to the world. Totally makes sense. I also like how you kept his visual curse. I can see the gods getting frustrated with trying to contain him, but it would seem a little bit more like a reward if they'd cured the curse as well.
I'll be interested to see if you write anything from Crysania's point of view....could be an interesting challenge given her blindness.
So I'm going to go reread the first two chapters! :) Thank you so much for sharing this!!!
The scene of the gods removing Raistlin's magic was especially excellent. And I loved the reasoning for returning Raistlin to the world. Totally makes sense. I also like how you kept his visual curse. I can see the gods getting frustrated with trying to contain him, but it would seem a little bit more like a reward if they'd cured the curse as well.
I'll be interested to see if you write anything from Crysania's point of view....could be an interesting challenge given her blindness.
So I'm going to go reread the first two chapters! :) Thank you so much for sharing this!!!
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October 15, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Yes there are still those who are interested and read these. I like Raistlin and Crysania pairing but the are too little stories.