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September 12, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Where's the rest of the story? You had this published on lavender eyes.com..but it was longer..
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April 26, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Aw, so sweet!
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January 9, 2009 at 12:00 AM
OMG! I LOVE IT!!!!! So hot and steamy, yet perfectly tasteful! Yummy! I SO wish I was her! And I am checking out the site you listed!
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March 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I've bookmarked your website, and finished reading the last chapter. The way you ended it there was kind of a let down, because having Drizzt deal with Catti-brie's eventual death and his continued living would be an interesting read, and a great way to continue, should you so wish. But I understand the need to finish, so I will say I've kept this bookmarked, and will return to read the more... er, interesting parts again and again.
Thank you for this wonderful story.
AmberRose
Thank you for this wonderful story.
AmberRose
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March 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yes! You've updated again. This is one of the hottest fics I've had the pleasure ;) of reading.
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February 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
do you ever use spell check?????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????
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January 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Though I have only read the first two chapters, the story has promise (I will read the rest, don't you worry!). I just have a couple of comments, hopefully to help you. :)
When you type a story, its best to either indent, or, in the case of most internet publishing sites, put an empty line between paragraphs (or both, if you're feeling really ambitious). It seperates things a little better for the readers, and actually makes it easier to read.
Secondly, I don't know if you have a beta reader or not, but from what I've seen so far, I would suggest you find one. I don't mean it to sound harsh, there are just a lot of little things in the way its typed that suggest you don't have a beta reader (aka, editor). Missing spaces, double typed words, typos, that kind of thing. It is not a slate on your writing, far from it. Usually I am constantly rearranging sentences in my head to make them sound better (to me, anyway), but I didn't do that at all when reading your story. Quite a few fanfic sites, especially if they have a forum, have access to availible beta readers. Or I would be more than willing. (I realize you don't know who I am at all, but I love reading/refining/editing written works, and am more than willing to help out any author who needs/wants it).
One thing I noticed, is that sometimes things seem the tiniest bit... not rushed really, but just not quite as long as it seems they should be, like sentences were cut out or something. As well, you could probably combine some of the chapters. I.E. Chapter two. While I see the importance of Regis recognizing what happened, I'm not sure this piece of information is important enough to have its own chapter, especially as short as it is.
So, now that I've told you all the "bad" things about it... lol How about some good things, eh? It may not look like many, but everything above is very minor.
I really like the opening of the first chapter. Yes, it is very similar to Elaine Cunningham's book, but I think it fits well. I also really like your characterization (its well done!) especially of Drizzt. A small confession - though I have been a Drizzt fan for five years or so, it never occured to me that there might be fan fiction about him, and when I did finally look for some, I was a little worried that it might be horrible and would totally ruin my view on one of my favorite literary characters of all time. Fortunately, this being the first piece of FR fic I have ever read, it did not.
If you have any questions about any of my comments, or about anything else (betaing, editing, suggestions, etc) feel free to e-mail me: open_destiny@hotmail.com
I look foreward to reading the rest of it.
- Lindsay
When you type a story, its best to either indent, or, in the case of most internet publishing sites, put an empty line between paragraphs (or both, if you're feeling really ambitious). It seperates things a little better for the readers, and actually makes it easier to read.
Secondly, I don't know if you have a beta reader or not, but from what I've seen so far, I would suggest you find one. I don't mean it to sound harsh, there are just a lot of little things in the way its typed that suggest you don't have a beta reader (aka, editor). Missing spaces, double typed words, typos, that kind of thing. It is not a slate on your writing, far from it. Usually I am constantly rearranging sentences in my head to make them sound better (to me, anyway), but I didn't do that at all when reading your story. Quite a few fanfic sites, especially if they have a forum, have access to availible beta readers. Or I would be more than willing. (I realize you don't know who I am at all, but I love reading/refining/editing written works, and am more than willing to help out any author who needs/wants it).
One thing I noticed, is that sometimes things seem the tiniest bit... not rushed really, but just not quite as long as it seems they should be, like sentences were cut out or something. As well, you could probably combine some of the chapters. I.E. Chapter two. While I see the importance of Regis recognizing what happened, I'm not sure this piece of information is important enough to have its own chapter, especially as short as it is.
So, now that I've told you all the "bad" things about it... lol How about some good things, eh? It may not look like many, but everything above is very minor.
I really like the opening of the first chapter. Yes, it is very similar to Elaine Cunningham's book, but I think it fits well. I also really like your characterization (its well done!) especially of Drizzt. A small confession - though I have been a Drizzt fan for five years or so, it never occured to me that there might be fan fiction about him, and when I did finally look for some, I was a little worried that it might be horrible and would totally ruin my view on one of my favorite literary characters of all time. Fortunately, this being the first piece of FR fic I have ever read, it did not.
If you have any questions about any of my comments, or about anything else (betaing, editing, suggestions, etc) feel free to e-mail me: open_destiny@hotmail.com
I look foreward to reading the rest of it.
- Lindsay
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December 31, 2004 at 12:00 AM
that is a change in Drizzt that i have never seen before....i approve, very good work. Please write more in the future
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November 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I can read this story over and over and still really 'feel' the sex scenes. I really enjoy this story a lot, so I hope you might work on it again. *goes back to read more*
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August 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Never got past the first chapter. The sex scene stolen straight from Daughter of the Drow was a complete turn off.
And, not that I ever liked Cattie-brie, but why is she talking like a complete numbskull? She had only a little bit of the dwarf's accent...and none of the dwarves were that bad.
And, not that I ever liked Cattie-brie, but why is she talking like a complete numbskull? She had only a little bit of the dwarf's accent...and none of the dwarves were that bad.