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Thanks 4 the review. I really appreciated it, because now I know what I need to fix. Sorry I only put in the opening, but I was short on time, and if I didn't submit it, It'd be deleted, and I'd have to start over again, since I download from the text area instad of http. And actually, the approach I was trying to take was to have everyone realize that there was another way into Narnia, an older way. A way that was there before the Pevensie children even came along. But I am willing to change it if you don't like it. I'm open to new suggestions, so if you have any, I'd be glad to hear them. I'll keep the way she came into Narnia the way it is now, until I figure out some other way to get her there, or until somebody gives me an idea. But once again, thanks! It's nice actually know someone read it, even though it's incomplete!lol : )

Well, it would be a lot better if you submitted more than just this on opening. Plus, you shouldn't have her entering through the wardrobe, since, realistically, the wardrobe would not be submitted to that museum until WELL after 1940, considering the Blitz was in 1940 (and yes, that is according to the movie). And no one else would be entering through the wardrobe anymore. Aslan even says so. Sorry, but a different approach to this story would be far better.