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September 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
It has potential, but for a first time, there was no build up and it feels like the scene was really rushed.
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August 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I like the idea of what if but I hate that you made Edawrd whore hiself out that way in order to get an agreement. Does that make sense? --I feel very contradictory.
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August 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
you captured Bella and Edwards characteristics and chemistry very well.
my only issue? vampires do not breathe.
my only issue? vampires do not breathe.
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July 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Some of the parts of the story seemed familiar but apart from that. It was good. Are you completed with this story? Because if not, update soon.
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July 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
this story is amazing i really hope you continue with it
Bells
Bells
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July 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Please keep going! I'm enjoying it muchly!
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July 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
hey, I had exactly the same idea about a fanfic, but I kinda suck at it, so I hope you'll write another chapter! it's very promising and pleeeeease, do continue it :)
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June 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I HATE you...I actually hate cliffies so therefore ... I HATE you. update please:)
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June 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Okay, I REALLY like this story; alot! That said, don't you think Edward gave in just a tad too easily? Not that I mind the sex that will be more than hot I'm sure, I just thought he'd put up a little more resistance to the idea.
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June 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
hahaha thats a cliffy i actually have to laugh at. you could not have stopped at a worser (not a word, i know) place. you truly are evil. now update!! hehe